Draft of Rhetorical Analysis

Here  is the draft of my Rhetorical analysis. I would like to know specifically what you think about:

• The way I structured it by introducing the essay to my audience, writing the essay, and then analyzing my own essay for my readers.
• The thoroughness of my rhetorical analysis: could I get more from it?
• The internal organization of my essay

Thanks!

Webb, Michaela. "Alex on OP" 2014